Rachel Chevalier ([info]rchevalier) wrote,
@ 2007-09-23 16:00:00
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Current mood: restless
Current music:piano concerto #2, first movement - rachmaninov
Entry tags:100_original, shorts, writing

A Treasonous Mirror
I am feeling very much relieved that my Brit Lit II prof moved teh due date for that killer poetry project to Thursday. I doubt I'm going to come up with anything decent by then (I've hit 1K, but only one of them really fits in with what we've been studying thus far) I... still have a while? Right. :P I might post the poems later, just to see if people can shred them enough that they're salvageable.

Been procrastinating all afternoon on my AP French project (Vietnam, where everyone hates the French), translated an old piece I wrote in German. To reiterate on the notes for that, I have no idea where I lifted the concept from; I just know it's not mine and I'd much appreciate anyone who could help me give credit where due. Also, I had to muss with phrasings and such to get it to translate "well", take that as you will, asides from the normal "blegh, I sucked three months ago" fixerupper thing.  Concrit, enough foreshadowing as to the "identity"?

Methinks I'll also use this for [info]100_original 'enemies' (table.)

 

When you smile, they look away. They all do.

They’re so afraid—

It’s because of the Bully. They fear him, and they fear for him: such a strange, starving boy, hungry but not for their lunchmoney surely, he should have been sated long ago… always with those fists of his, tyranny triumphant in the cries of the weak and the smile of the strong.

He will never stop. How could he? He can’t even stop himself.

He’s not just stealing their lunchmoney, after all: he’s stealing their childhood, the childhood he’ll never have…

Your fists clench. You hate him, you hate him you hate him you hate him you—

You open your eyes, and see him there, there, right in front of you: the Bully.

You move without thought.

Hit him.

Without hesitation.

Hit him harder.

You can’t stop yourself—

harder

You shudder to a stop, and fall.

The shards of the mirror are scattered around you.

You are the Bully.


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[info]gussiki
2007-09-23 08:42 pm UTC (link)
Artemis Awakening, by Enigma/darklight ascendant.

Um, can't help much about foreshadowing... when my eyes just absorbed the whole thing in one go and the last sentence stood out clear enough for me. :P But I think the first line's good enough for foreshadowing.

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[info]rchevalier
2007-09-23 10:24 pm UTC (link)
XD Thanks.

Mm. It is rather short. *pokes at it* It just... bothers me structurally. Maybe I ought to flesh it out more, but then; what would I add?

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[info]thegracenotes
2007-09-23 10:02 pm UTC (link)
Yeah. Imma agree with Gus, Mind just went straight to it, as well as the fic, at the word 'bully'. *shrug*

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[info]rchevalier
2007-09-23 10:25 pm UTC (link)
Mmph. *prods at it*

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[info]lupindrake
2007-09-24 11:43 am UTC (link)
Aw, if that were in French, I would love to translate that myself, or see if I could translate it myself.

Good luck on all of your projects and stuff though.

...ah, there it is. Awesome - I like how that can happen in real life. Don't you just hate the concept of bullies?

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[info]rchevalier
2007-09-24 07:49 pm UTC (link)
I've got something else I'm translating from French. It's... weird. :P I'll feed to to LJ once I have my translation done; then you could have a go at it? Translating style is a bit beyond me at this point. XD

Bullies are... urgh. Last year I got pushed around a bit at school. Not so much this year (I am teh all-powerful Senior!) but... it's just icky. Yeah. :P

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[info]lupindrake
2007-09-24 10:21 pm UTC (link)
Ah, I would love to see what you come up with! Doing that is beyond me as well; I am working on understanding what is in front of me and responding decently. ^^;

I know how that is too - I used to be teased so much when I was younger, but thankfully, it stopped in tenth grade. Maybe it was because I made friends with a lot of guys who would beat people up if they messed with me...? I guess that is one advantage of being friends with those on the football team and helping them out with classwork from time to time. XD

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[info]rchevalier
2007-09-24 10:24 pm UTC (link)
*grin* Yeah. Like... I can read fairly well (I'm working on a work of philosophy now, anyway, and I've read some novels), and I can write rhyming poetry, though the rhymes are sometimes a mite forced. But style? I'm not good enough for that yet. :P Might be another year...

...though one of my best RL friends just got back from a year in France. We've been yabbering in French quite a bit. Makes me feel like I don't know what I'm doing, but it's really helped my oral French skills, and vocab.

*nodnod* Yeah. I've got fairly popular friends now (not popular in the cheerleader sense; just well regarded as good people.) Didn't always, but they sorta envelop me in a cloud of coolness. :D

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[info]lupindrake
2007-09-25 12:22 pm UTC (link)
That's what it's like with all of my friends. So cool they are. ^^

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